Wednesday, June 28, 2006

New Poem (deleted)

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3 comments:

Aisha said...

Hi Rob,

I like this very much: nice build to the surprising logic of the ending-- reminds me of the poems you quoted bfrom by Andrew Duncan: man and the universe, its inanimate objects.

Aisha

Cailleach said...

I like this very much Rob. I think the long thin form suits the terseness of the words - almost like a rope.

Rob Mackenzie said...

Aisha, cailleach - thanks for the feedback. Yes, man and the inanimate objects is the theme. I hadn't thought about Andrew Duncan when I wrote it, but my subconscious must have been working away.