Sunday, June 18, 2006

Poem (deleted)

Here's a brand new poem.

It's now deleted, but thanks to all who read and to those who commented. Much appreciated.

5 comments:

vmh said...

I just wanted to let you know I really enjoyed this poem. Thank you. It is sticking with me.

Vicky

Cailleach said...

This is great stuff Rob -really enjoyed your use of imagery in this strong poem.

Just a quibble with the sudden change in the last stanza from 'poem' to 'poet,' which jarred with me.

Rob Mackenzie said...

Thanks!

I also wondered about the final stanza. Maybe I'm pushing things a step further than the poem needs to go. I'll keep thinking on it.

Larry said...

I second Calleach about the last S, and third the others that this is very good. just think up a final "The poem" stroph.

Rob Mackenzie said...

Thanks Larry. I'm still thinking on a final stanza.