Friday, March 03, 2006

Poem (deleted for the moment)

poem deleted for the moment.


Larry said...

...And there will be
a death, for no thought is so bloodless
that it cannot die.

I love the authority of these lines.

You are getting good at meshing ideas and images. I must admit though that I didn't follow the poem's claim: thoughts have a body so they die, but words have no body so they don't die? It is strange for a poet to give the spoken word such insubstantial immortality. Maybe it would be better to show how the thought or virgin impression dies once it is transmutated into the frozen immutable body of words? There's a lot to sort out here.


Rob Mackenzie said...

Yes, I think I need to do more work on this one. I'm glad you enjoyed some of it. That's a start.